Revised Introduction

I think my second pass at an introduction was pretty successful.. check it out!

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First Draft:

Public speech acts in entrepreneurship can seem few and far between. But every once in a while, there is some conflict or trend that prompts people to start writing more. Many people who are new to the field of entrepreneurship have a hard time breaking down public speech acts and figuring out exactly how to interpret them and their composition, that is what I hope to explain in this piece. By looking at Julie Hall’s “Women Entrepreneurs 2.0”, I will provide examples of how to read a public speech at closely while considering all of the factors that go into its composition.

In this article, Julie Hall separates the segments of her text clearly to demonstrate that there are different ways for women to make advances in what is viewed as a 'man's' field, and in each section she appeals to our emotions and logic from a new angle.

New and Improved!:
"If you don't like how things are, change it. You're not a tree." This advice from Jim Rohn, one of the greatest entrepreneurs ever, seems to be exactly what Julie Hall takes to her in her article for entrepreneurship.com. What is it that is deterring women from tech? Many would point to the atmosphere they have to deal with once they've entered the tech, engineering, or startups industry. Julie says that women entrepreneurs have it tough but that's no reason to give up on their goals. In this public speech act, Julie employs a number of rhetorical tools in order to make her case.